Martial God Space Chapter 20

Chapter 20 – A brief appearance

Ye Xiwen and Wang Lie both rushed to the competition venue, Wang Lie with some excitement said: “Man, this time you have to get a good rank!”

Wang Lie did not participate this time, to get into top hundred ranks, at least one should be at the fourth stage, but he just had a breakthrough recently, he knew very well that he didn’t have a chance this time, in fact he had never been that ambitious.

“En!” Ye Xiwen nodded.

“But you have to be careful, I heard the news that Ma Ying is planning to deal with you!” Wang Lie said seriously, “Ma Ying has put the word out encouraging others to cripple you as a revenge for his younger brother!”

“Cripple me? Hmmm, let’s see if he has the skill!” Ye Xiwen said with a sneer.

Venue was packed with crowd, Ye Xiwen arrived on the scene first and took out the Serial No. 127 for himself, there were two numbers of same serial number, the first opponent would be the one who drew out the same serial number, once the time arrived, key figures within the Yi Yuan school arrived successively, they were using the technique ‘flying high false step’, to fly above the high platform. (TL: can also be called ‘Volley virtual step’)

In the eyes of all the disciples flashed a look of envy, although ‘flying high false step’ was not an actual flight, but it was not something they could easily attain.

Everyone suppressed their breaths to this performance, they were Yi Yuan school seniors and the true backbone that supported the school, Yuan clan people and Zhang clan were already the most powerful parallel forces of the Qingfeng mountain and nearby region, and if their performance was good, they could receive a reward from some elder, that would lead to a meteoric rise, this had happened in the past!

 Ye Xiwen in those elders, saw his father Ye Kongming’s figure, among the group of elders, it did not seem conspicuous.

The venue occupied a very wide land area, two hundred platforms (TL: arenas or rings) were placed for the contest.

Wang Lie and Ye Xiwen both went to the No. 127 arena.

“You are No.127 ring’s other contestant” Ye Xiwen just saw a big and tall disciple who walked over to him laughing and said, “You really have a bad luck, unexpectedly have bumped into Shi Feng brother, just admit defeat!”

“Shi Feng brother has acquired the peak of fifth stage, even if to get into the top 50 ranks, he is definitely capable!” that tall disciple continued. “You, if you do not hurry up and admit defeat now, when the time comes, it will be difficult to give up before losing some of your body parts!”

Wang Lie’s complexion also changed: “I did not expect it would actually be Shi Feng!”

“Ah man, it’s too bad, that your first opponent turned out to be that Shi Feng, his methods are very malicious and ruthless, three years ago in the competition, there were several disciples who admitted defeat, their bones were broken, causing 6 months worth of injuries!”

“Quite a bully!” Ye Xiwen said.

“Bully, ha ha ha, for a long time no one has called me a bully!” Suddenly a burst of laughter spread in the arena, “You don’t have a good luck I suppose, as someone has asked me to break your legs!”

Ye Xiwen looked up, there he saw a tall tower-like young man, with a fiendishly grinning face looking at Ye Xiwen.

It was Shi Feng.

“Boy, do you dare to come up now!” Shi Feng grinned, “So long as you kowtow a 100 times, I’ll let you off!”

 “That depends on you!” Ye Xiwen sneered, and jumped on. “Now that you have received benefits from others to break my legs, I’ll make you bear the consequences for your sins!”

“Young boy, you really dare to come up, a move, with just one hit I will beat you!” Shi Feng laughed loudly.

“127th arena fight, begin!” the referee saw both of them standing and ready, then opened his mouth and spoke, as for the two previous dialogues, he turned a deaf ear, as if he did not hear anything.

As referee’s voice just fell, Shi Feng shot out like a shell from the catapult, although tall, but his speed was incredibly fast, he rushed towards Ye Xiwen.

Although this person was insolent, but his strength was the real deal, although his agility was not on a high level, but the explosive force was great, in a blink of an eye he had rushed to the front of Ye Xiwen.

Shi Feng grinned fiendishly and opened his big hand to directly twist Ye Xiwen’s head.

“Elders Ye, is that your son fighting on the 127th platform!” said the elder sitting close to Ye Kongming.

“It is my son!” Ye Kongming smiled and nodded.

“I recall, more than a decade ago elder Ye was embracing him when he returned, I just saw him once, but in a blink of an eye, more than a decade has passed, he is already this big now!” The elder said with emotion.

“His opponent can be a tough one!” The elder while staring at the ring, said, “Inborn natural power, he is more formidable than an average person!”

“It doesn’t matter, this will allow him to gain experience!” Ye Kongming smiled, as if he didn’t care, but the eyes were tightly locked in the ring, somewhat worried.

“Bang!” Ye Xiwen stuck his palm out, it hit fiercely right on Shi Feng’s big hand, the two sides directly caused a collision making a sound of huge air explosion.

Ye Xiwen stood there calm and motionless, Shi Feng had an inborn natural power, although he had just acquired the peak of fifth stage, but the strength in his hand was absolutely over the sixth stage, comparable to the masters of sixth stage, but he still could not move Ye Xiwen even the slightest.

“Impossible!” Shi Feng’s one pair of cow-like eyes was full of surprise looking at Ye Xiwen, unbelievably, even if it was a sixth stage master, his strength was not one bit inferior, but unexpectedly Ye Xiwen didn’t budge.

“Boom!”

Accompanied with a burst of thunderstorm sound, Ye Xiwen’s palm shot out a group of torpedo shaped Qi, with a lightning speed, enormous and mighty, a palm pressed against Shi Feng’s chest.

“Bang!” Shi Feng’s tower-like body was flown up when shot by Ye Xiwen’s palm, his blood sprayed all over, bones in his body were broken in half, and he fell directly off the stage.

“What, how is this possible!”

The audience was in uproar, all the people paying attention to this battle could not believe their eyes, they had been very optimistic about this Shi Feng, but he couldn’t even stop Ye Xiwen’s one move, was actually sent flying out of the arena, no one knew whether he was alive or dead.

“Cheating, he must be cheating!” Several disciples who were close to Shi Feng suddenly found it difficult to accept started yelling and said, “He has definitely plotted against Shi Feng brother!”

Made a brief appearance and sent Shi Feng flying, how was this possible.

“Shut up!” the referee said in a cold voice, who was right or wrong, he saw very clearly, did not need those juniors to teach him what to do.

“This competition, Ye Xiwen wins, now he will enter the second round!”

“Idiots!” Ye Xiwen glanced at those disciples.

Shi Feng however was just a small pawn, presumably, Ma Ying was the one behind, but there was no rush, Ma Ying was popular, to win the championship , sooner or later, they would meet for sure.

“Good, good, unexpectedly, I was totally wrong!” The elder sitting close to Ye kongming said with a smile.

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69 thoughts on “Martial God Space Chapter 20

  1. You have a better grasp with converting from Chinese structure to English structure than me. I can just understand quite a few words, lol.

    DISCLAIMER: It’s a HUGE mess.

    Venue was packed with crowd (sounds a bit weird) –> The venue was packed with a crowd

    If could also be High Flying Void Step, or somethin’. You choose.

    backbone that supported (this works but…) –> backbone which supported (sounds nicer, imo)

    supported the school, Yuan clan people –> supported the school, Yi Yuan clan people

    some elder, that would –> some elder. That would (sentence too long)

    “You are No.127 ring’s another contestant” Ye Xiwen –> “You are No.127 ring’s other contestant,” Ye Xiwen

    unexpectedly have bumped into Shi Feng brother –> actually having bumped into Brother Shi Feng

    The title thingy of people comes after the name, but in English, it should be before. Which reminds me, change the Ye Xiwen child in the previous chapter to Child Ye Xiwen.

    even if to get into the top 50 ranks, he is definitely capable! –> even seizing the top 50 ranks is extremely promising/hopeful!

    hurry up to admit defeat –> hurry up and admit defeat (sound better)

    malicious and ruthless, three years ago –> malicious and ruthless. Three years ago (long sentence)

    arena, “you don’t –> arena, “You don’t

    tall tower like young man –> tall, tower-like young man

    Shi Feng grinned, “as long as you –> Shi Feng grinned, “So long as you

    dare to come up, a move –> dare to come up. A move

    with just one hit I will beat you –> with just one hit I will cripple you

    standing and ready –> standing up

    and spoke, as for the –> and spoke. As for the

    he turned a deaf ear –> he turned a deaf ear to them (I don’t like the slight vagueness)

    from the catapult –> from a catapult

    Shi Feng shot out like a shell from the catapult, although tall, but his speed was incredibly fast, he rushed towards Ye Xiwen. –> Shi Feng shot out like a shell from a catapult. Although tall, his speed was incredibly fast. He rushed towards Ye Xiwen.

    Although this person was insolent, but his strength was the real deal, although his agility was not on a high level, but the explosive force was great, in a blink of an eye he had rushed to the front of Ye Xiwen. –> Although this person was insolent, his strength was the real deal. Although his agility was not on a high level, the explosive force was great. In a blink of an eye he had rushed in front of Ye Xiwen.

    Ye elders –> Elder Ye

    decade ago elder Ye –> decade ago Elder Ye (this is preference, but if it’s like Mr and Mrs, then capitalise it)

    The next two dialogues, change the thing to ‘The Elder’, over using ‘the elder’

    the elder while staring at the ring, said –> the elder said while staring at the ring (did you brainfart?)

    sound of huge air explosion –> sound of a huge air explosion

    calm and motionless, Shi Feng –> calm and motionless. Shi Feng

    although he had just acquired the peak of fifth stage, the strength

    sixth stage, but he still –> sixth stage. But he still

    couldn’t not –> could not/couldn’t

    cow-like eyes was full –> cow-like eyes were full

    unbelievably, even if it –> unbelievably. Even if it

    burst of thunderstorm sound (I hated doing these) –> a thunderstorm sound (I vouch that the ‘burst’ is like 一个, so just forget about using burst. I found this out after a while, but who knows? I might be wrong)

    group of torpedo shaped Qi –> cloud of torpedo-shaped Qi (I think that, if Qi can be condensed into gas, maybe it can become like a cloud of smoke)

    shaped Qi, with a lightning –> shaped Qi. With a lightning

    body was flown up –> body flew upwards

    Oh my god i hate this character 拍, shot/clapped/patted by a palm… I don’t like it at all. Maybe you can use ‘when beat by Ye Xiwen’s palm’.

    palm, blood sprayed all over, bones –> palm. Blood sprayed all over, the bones

    their eyes, they had been –> their eyes. They had been

    one move, was actually sent flying –> one move. To actually be sent flying

    the arena, no one knew –> the arena. No one knew

    started yelling and said –> started shouting and screaming

    Made a brief appearance and sent Shi Feng flying –> To make a brief appearance and send Shi Feng flying

    “Shut up!” the referee said in a cold voice, who was right or wrong, he saw very clearly, did not need those juniors to teach him what to do. –> “Shut up!” The referee said in a cold voice. Who was right or wrong, he saw very clearly. He did not need these juniors to teach him what to do.

    no rush, Ma Ying –> no rush. Ma Ying

    the elder sitting close to kongming said –> the Elder sitting close to Ye Kongming said

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    1. OMG!
      What the hell , you take grammar way too seriously haha
      i will do the changes but not all of them (anyway most of them are you personal preferences), its a waste of time, i should rather concentrate on the next chapter’s translation. As long as the feel of the story is delivered correctly, a few grammatical mistakes can do

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      1. But the run on sentences…and this…and that… Unacceptable, young Padawan.

        I expect to be bored af now that school is finally over. So *sneaks glances left and right*, gimme your email and I’ll just send the goods. Nothin’ illegal, mate.

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      2. Hey novice are you sure you don’t want a proofreader/editor? I could Fox those, so thatguywhosthere doesn’t have to both3r you (as much).

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      3. You have misunderstood.
        ‘thatguywhosthere’ doesn’t bother me, he is a nice guy and a very good critic! I learn a lot because of him.
        Thanks for the offer , i will think about it when i take up more projects

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      4. Normal sized chapter… if I have time, like 30 minutes to an hour. I don’t have much time now… but I’ll see what I can do. I’ll start to have time by July 17th. In fact, I can just work on the weekends with the past chapters.

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      5. Haha, I can work at least 30 minutes… And I’m free on the weekends so I can work that out. xD

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      6. MTLing? I only do it for reading xD It takes more time to MTL, but I’d be willing to try. (Though editing would be my primary focus)

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      7. You should give it a try in your spare time, it will improve your editing skills as well, as when editing a translated chapter, in addition to grammatical mistakes , there can be many meaning related mistakes where chinese text is wrongly interpreted and translated by the translator. If you can find out those mistakes, it will increase your market value as an editor!

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    2. ‘a crowd’ => invalid as ‘crowd’ is plural
      some elder, that would => this is how the author has written/typed

      The title thingy of people comes after the name, but in English, it should be before. Which reminds me, change the Ye Xiwen child in the previous chapter to Child Ye Xiwen..=> i want the readers to know how author has actually written in chinese so it doesn’t matter.

      even seizing the top 50 ranks is extremely promising/hopeful!=> he can’t seize all the 50 ranks alone, he is after all just one person 😛

      malicious and ruthless. Three years ago (long sentence)=> honor the author , don’t change the way he places the commas dammit
      dare to come up, a move –> dare to come up. A move=> honor the author

      he turned a deaf ear –> he turned a deaf ear to them (I don’t like the slight vagueness)=> blame the author for that

      from the catapult –> from a catapult=> its a phrase called ‘a shell from the catapult’ , its can’t be ‘a shell from a catapult’ haha

      Shi Feng shot out like a shell from a catapult. Although tall, his speed was incredibly fast. He rushed towards Ye Xiwen.=> this is how the author has written/typed

      Although this person was insolent, but his strength was the real deal, although his agility was not on a high level, but the explosive force was great, in a blink of an eye he had rushed to the front of Ye Xiwen.=> this is how the author has written/typed

      the elder while staring at the ring, said –> the elder said while staring at the ring (did you brainfart?)=> this is how the author has written/typed

      sound of huge air explosion –> sound of a huge air explosion=> the sentence is ‘making a sound of huge air explosion.’ so your suggestion is wrong.

      calm and motionless, Shi Feng –> calm and motionless. Shi Feng => this is how the author has written/typed

      cow-like eyes was full –> cow-like eyes were full=> pair of cow-live eyes was full ,, here ‘was’ signifies ‘pair’ which is singular

      palm, blood sprayed all over, bones –> palm. Blood sprayed all over, the bones
      their eyes, they had been –> their eyes. They had been=> this is how the author has written/typed

      “Shut up!” the referee said in a cold voice, who was right or wrong, he saw very clearly, did not need those juniors to teach him what to do. –> “Shut up!” The referee said in a cold voice. Who was right or wrong, he saw very clearly. He did not need these juniors to teach him what to do.
      no rush, Ma Ying –> no rush. Ma Ying
      => this is how the author has written/typed

      WELL, i have made many changes thanks to your critical editing but please from next time , don’t be a grammatical maniac and suggest while thinking how the author might have written it. Its seriously a waste of time but THANKS A LOT!

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      1. Crowd is a singular noun for a plural, if that makes any sense. It should be like the word ‘lot’. I searched ‘crowd define’ on Google, and it said ‘a crowd’, so yeah!

        Oh, the eyes had pair before them, oops.

        And the ‘although’ and ‘but’ thing. I shall present my case, *ahem*. This website says so – http://resources.allsetlearning.com/chinese/grammar/%22Although%22_with_%22suiran%22_and_%22danshi%22

        The comma thing is a questionable issue. But for better fluidity whilst reading, splitting them up into multiple sentences is better (as told to me by some readers when I was doing this novel). Think of the readers, bro!

        Well, w/e. I’ll be a silent watcher from now on. Only there when you are desperate.

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      2. ‘a crowd’ is used only in one type of sentences for example : “a crowd of insects assembled around the flowers”
        you must signify ‘a crowd’ of what?
        “Venue was packed with crowd”
        i can write it as “venue was packed with a crowd of disciples”
        “The comma thing is a questionable issue. But for better fluidity whilst reading, splitting them up into multiple sentences is better (as told to me by some readers when I was doing this novel). Think of the readers, bro!”
        => i believe our readers want to know how the writer must have wanted to express the story , removing the commas will basically deteriorate the effect of how things happened.
        Don’t be a silent watcher, it must have taken you a hell lot of time to notice the errors and pointing them out so i appreciate it!
        However , point out only the fatal mistakes , don’t underestimate our readers one bit 😀

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      3. regarding ‘Although’ thingy , i accept your point that its grammatical uses are different in chinese and english but ,, do you expect me to teach this difference to so many readers? i should rather make appropriate changes to make the sentence ‘easy to understand’ for the readers.

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      4. Ah, a shame. I hope to be a joker some day. Unfortunately, all I can come up with are torture methods, exploding dead bodies, weird discharge, cannibalism, etc…oh woe is me.

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      5. Search up the Doritos Story. Also the Jolly Ranchers Story. Warning, you may need mind bleach.

        Also, what’s 9 inches long, pink, and makes my girlfriend cry when I put it in her mouth?
        Wanna kno? Hmmmm?

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      6. Isa joke, I wouldn’t cross lines like depression. That’s a big line to cross. But I often get some friends to go WTF occasionally. Haha. HAHAHA.

        But yeah. Offending peeps is bad, m’kay? Unless it’s a joke on reddit.

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      7. I know when to be and when not to be. Even if some could say I’m ‘socially awkward’. But when serious shit is going on, I can’t help but find a joke about it, sometimes saying it to whom it may concern. Haha…a bit less considerate.

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      8. How flattering of you *cue intense, extremely red flushing of the face and facial organs*, but maybe, actually. Don’t really talk much to strangers most of the time, only letting loose with mah mates. According to my best, he said I was a bit hard to talk to though. But no matter.

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      9. I guess you feel comfortable in your close circle of friends, as for strangers, they have to pass through a lot of tests prepared by you to get into that circle.
        Hard to talk to? hmm maybe because you are very straightforward and speak up your mind without thinking twice about the consequences .
        Well you might scare away the strangers who are unaware of your true nature.

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      10. Ehehehe…you make it sound like it came from a psychiatrist. And that ending really left a mysterious timbre. I like it.

        Sorry if I took long, I was reading about Terraria drama pertaining to the infamous, narcissistic, money grubbing HERO.

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      11. I’m reading it already, my good sir. It’s great, I like the different, slow paced nature, contrary to some others.

        But hot diggity dogsh*t, this HERO is in deep sh*t right now. He dun goofed up. Now almost everyone hates him, his relationship with the devs and community went down the pooper. It’s quite amusing.

        On a side note, do you watch anime?

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    1. Thanks man,, i try my best to keep my translations close to how the author must have wanted to express it . It may seem weird because the way of speaking chinese is different the way its in English.

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      1. Yes I understand, I tried translating raw to english by MT and found the result very weird… full of broken sentences… so if one wants to understand in english then one need to bascially rewrite most of the sentences… so how you rewrite it’s up to you… so keep it easy, follow your own style and enjoy the work while you are at it.

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      2. You are right, to make sense, and to actually make it easier for the readers to understand, i literally have to add a few words without changing the feel/meaning of the story written in the chapter.

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  2. Thanks for the chapter! Not sure if his father is turning a blind eye to the fact that he went from fourth stage to sixth in one month otherwise this is a massive plot hole.

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